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Writing College Application Essays: First Commandment: “Know Thyself”

Question: What’s more important than the topic of your college application essay?
Answer:
Knowing who you are.

What do I mean when I say “know who you are?”

  • Know what kind of person you are
  • Know what your values are
  • Know why you make the choices you do
  • Know how you want to represent yourself to the colleges who will be reading your college application essay.

This can be tough. We usually don’t write about ourselves, or think about what makes us interesting or what our goals are. We usually don’t reflect. But reflection is very important. You can even do it before you choose a topic. In some cases it will lead to a topic. And wouldn’t that be great?!

Question: How do you figure out who you are?
Answer:
Do the research. Interview your subject.

You’d do research on a subject for a school paper, right? Of course. Your college application essay is no different —  it’s just that the subject is you. So let’s get started. Here’s how you get to know yourself:

1. Schedule: You need a quiet time with no intrusions. It can be one longer session or several shorter ones, but try to get it done over a few days at most. Your don’t want long interruptions of time —  you want your thoughts to flow.

2. Prep: Make sure you have a pen and paper or a computer to write down your answers. After each question give yourself time to think.

3. Interview questions. Here are 6 questions to get you started:

1. What are 3 values I respect? For instance — respect, loyalty, courage? (There are many values you can think about. Google them.)

2. How do I reflect these values in my choices?

3. How would I describe myself to a stranger?

4. What do my friends like about me?

5. What’s been the hardest thing in my life?

6. What are my goals and how do I plan to reach them?

You’ll probably think of more questions as you go along. After all, you know your subject best.

When you start writing you’ll find you may not use all of your answers in your college application essay. That’s okay; you have a reservoir of material to draw from. What’s even better is these answers don’t belong to anyone else — they can’t. They help define who you are. They detail what makes you interesting, what your journey has been. No one else will be able to write your essay. That’s the way it should be. That’s what colleges are looking for in a great college application essay.

One more thing about your interview subject: Make sure he or she is honest. If you allow your subject to skate by with half-truths or skirt important answers you won’t really get to know him. Neither will the college you want to attend. And that would be a real shame.


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How to Succeed with the Common Application Essay 500 Word Limit: pt 1 (7 Tips to Remember)

Welcome! This is the first of a 4 part series on how to succeed with the Common Application Essay’s 500 Word Limit.

In April 2011 the Common Application changed the word limit for the personal essay. The Common App essay word limit is now 500 words.

Why the switch? According to Common Application Executive Director Rob Killion, allowing students to write essays of unlimited length “led to essays that were far too long, less well-written, and…often skimmed rather than read by admission officers.

Are there drawbacks? Yes. Some students will have trouble saying everything they want to say in 500 words or less. You may be one of them. But don’t be discouraged, you can write a great 500 word Common App essay.

Here are 7 Important Writing Tips to Help You Stay Under 500 Words:

1. Be Focused. Know what you want to discuss and make sure each sentence helps you get there.

2. Be Succinct. Choose your words wisely.

3. Be Specific. Create interesting imagery.

4. Be Clear. The introduction should flow clearly into the body of your essay. The body of your essay should transition into a clear conclusion.

5. Make Your Point. What do you want the college admission reader to know about you by the end of your essay? Make sure you achieve this goal.

6. Keep Count. Count your words. Don’t wait until you’re finished — you might have to rework your entire essay.

7. Edit.  Editing is essential with a 500 word essay. If you’re using three words where one will do, toss the extra words. If you have a sentence that gets your essay a bit off point, leave it on the cutting room floor. Be brave! Your essay will read better and come within the word count.

These are the important basics for writing a good essay. Print them out and check that you’re doing them as you write and you’ll be on your way.

Now you’re ready for part 2: How to Think Small and Still Tell a Big Story

related posts:
How to Succeed with the Common App Essay Word Limit: Pt 2 (Think small and still tell a big story)
How to Succeed with the Common App Essay Word Limit: Pt 3 (Essay samples)
How to Succeed with the Common App Essay Word Limit: Pt 4 (Ideas that work)
for more info: read Time.com on the Common App Essay Word Limit

Sharon Epstein, FIrst Impressions College Consulting..Sharon Epstein is owner of First Impressions College Consulting
Need help? Get in touch! I work with students everywhere: in-person, over the phone, and by computer. Visit my website for more info.

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Writing College Application Essays: How to Choose a Topic

I was speaking to the Joel Barlow High School PTSA in Redding today (thanks, PTSA!) about writing college application essays, and was asked a great question: Do I have any suggestions for the student who’s having trouble deciding what to write about? Yes!

Choosing a topic for a college application essay can be a daunting, if not downright intimidating experience. Many students think that because nothing big or dramatic has happened to them in their lives they don’t have anything to write about. Wrong!

You don’t have to be the best athlete, have won lots of awards, or had a big “moment of revelation” to write a great college application essay. Far from it. While big experiences can make good essays, the small things can be just as powerful, if not more so.

Remember, colleges look for 3 main things in a college application essay:

  • How well you write
  • How well you organize your thoughts
  • You. What makes you unique? What kind of person are you? What kind of choices do you make?

When you’re choosing a topic you want to find an experience — a story — that will reflect what’s unique about you. You never want 100 other students to be able to write the same essay you’re writing. It should only be able to come from you.

Here are 3 questions to ask yourself if you’re having trouble choosing a topic for your college application essay:

1. Is there a time in my life I’ve taken a risk?

2. Is there a time I’ve turned a failure into a success?

3. Has there been a difficult choice I’ve had to make, but am glad I made it?

Notice that these questions deal with a personal journey —  they ask you to discuss and reflect on some way that you’ve grown into the person you are.

Start with these questions. If you can’t think of an answer, ask your parents. Parents are excellent resources when you’re looking for college essay topics because they know you well, have seen you grow, and may remember something that you don’t.

Always remember that no matter what topic you choose, you want to represent yourself in a positive light. But that light can shine just as brightly on the small things as the big ones — as long as it reflects you.


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Looking for Ideas for Your College Application Essay? Look Behind You

Looking for ideas for your college application essay? Look behind you.

Why? Because life moves forward. We don’t stop. What gets our attention is what demands the most of us at any moment —  often the loudest, the biggest, the most entertaining, or the next most important thing we have to do.

What’s not demanding your attention? Pay attention to that. See what you find.

Here’s an example: I was traveling in rural China when our group stopped to visit a preschool. The children at the school often had visitors, and when they saw us they ran toward us, hoping we’d brought toys or candy. As they held up their hands for colorful balloons I took out my camera, knowing this would make a great picture. Then I turned around. Peeking out from behind a tree was a little girl, holding a small washcloth in her hands. Her eyes were focused on her friends. This was the picture I took. A shy little girl, protected by her tree. Her eyes told a much better story.

When I say “look behind you” I’m saying “pay attention.” Look around and see not only the things that demand your attention, but also the things that don’t. You will find ideas in those moments. You’ll find details. You might just find the makings of a memorable college application essay.

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SAT vs. ACT – Which Test to Take?

SAT or ACT ? Which test should you take? That question is being asked a lot these days, and the answers can be confusing.  To help shed some light on the subject I talked to educational expert Barbara D. Levine, owner and director of Chyten Educational Services in New Canaan, Connecticut.

Barbara, welcome to the blog!
Thank you, Sharon. Glad to do it.

Is there a disadvantage to taking either the ACT or  SAT?

No. Every college now in the country takes either test. So there is no disadvantage to taking one over the other.

It seems like many people feel the SAT is the better choice.

There’s probably still some regional bias in the northeast, where more students still take the SAT. I think that’s because the ACT didn’t start here. The ACT started in the mid-west and was a mid-west exam for many years. It’s only over the last three or four years that the test migrated to both coasts, and the last two or so that every school has accepted both tests.

What are the differences between the ACT and SAT?

The two tests are structured differently. The timing of each test, the pacing within each section, the sections themselves, the content of each test, and how the questions are presented are all different.

Can you elaborate on that? Sure.

The sections are different.

  • The ACT has four multiple choice sections (English, Math, Reading, and Science) plus the essay.
  • The SAT has 10 sections, including the essay. The sections are made up of 3 components: Critical Reading, Math, and Writing.

The content is different.

  • The English section of the ACT focuses on grammar and is heavily weighted toward punctuation. The SAT includes grammar and stresses vocabulary.
  • The math section of the ACT  includes some trigonometry and algebra 2, which aren’t on the SAT.
  • The science section of the ACT is more like a reading exercise. It’s not really a test of your knowledge of science. It asks you to analyze data that’s presented in the form of science questions and charts and graphs, but it doesn’t test your knowledge of biology or physics or chemistry.

The timing is different.

  • On the ACT, you complete each section in turn. The first section is always English for 45 minutes; the next is math for 60 minutes, then reading for 35 minutes and then science for 35 minutes. The essay for the ACT is always at the end of the test.
  • On the SAT the essay is always first. Each section is either 20 or 25 minutes in length. Sections alternate throughout the test, so you can encounter a reading section next to a math section on one test, but two math sections in a row on another test.

The questions are presented differently.

  • The ACT is written in a straightforward fashion. You don’t have to worry about reading between the lines or parsing out any language.
  • The SAT is written in a much more complicated fashion and requires you to analyze what they’re really asking. In fact, for many questions you’re given 2 out of 5 possible answers that are very close. That makes it much harder to determine which is the right answer, because you’re expected to analyze the language that’s being used in the question.

The pacing is different.

  • Because the ACT is written in a much more straight-forward fashion than the SAT, more questions are included in each section and the pacing is quicker.  For instance, in the math section there are 60 questions that need to be answered in 60 minutes.  If a student doesn’t finish the first 40 questions within about a half hour, he/she will probably run out of time and not get to all 60 questions.

How Do I Choose?

SAT –  If you’re very analytic and you like to dissect things mentally, then the SAT might be a very good fit.

ACT – You don’t need that same sort of analytical focus you do for the SAT, you just have to know your content. You still have to know your grammar, and you have to know your math.

WRITING

When it comes to writing it depends on your writing style. If you’re a good writer either test can be a good fit. Both tests have essays. (The essay on the ACT is optional so you want to take it “with writing,” which means with the essay.)

SAT — looks for examples that you can pull from literature and from history. It wants you to use very strong vocabulary and a good turn of phrase. They’re looking for somebody who can express themselves in a very sophisticated fashion.

ACT —  is not looking for that. The ACT is looking to see if you can make your case and give examples, but these can be examples from real life and based on your own experience. The ACT is looking for a little more of a straightforward essay where the vocabulary or command of literature is probably not weighted quite as highly.

Chyten offers a diagnostic test to help students decide. Yes. Chyten has spent a number of years developing a diagnostic tool in order to evaluate up front which test is the better fit for a student so students don’t have to focus on both. And that is a huge time saver for the student.

If I don’t have a tutor, what study tips do you recommend?

  1.     Come up with a plan where you work on preparing for the test probably  about 3 months in advance.
  2.     Try and carve out time every other day or every third day.
  3.     Go through each of the sections.
  4.     Do sample problems.
  5.     Review math. Reviewing math is important because half of the math in both tests is basic algebra and geometry. Most juniors are already at algebra 2 or they’re in pre-calc, so they may have forgotten the basics. You need to review them, and that takes a little time.

Can parents be helpful in this process or do they need to stay out of the way? I think a student needs to be self-motivated. Where parents can be helpful is obviously in being supportive and helping them to figure out how to fit this in to their schedule. But the student has to do the work. The parents can’t do that.

If a student’s having trouble, should they think about finding help? Yes. Even if you are a good test-taker, the challenge is these tests are not like anything else you’ll be doing. For instance, students aren’t taught formal grammar anymore, yet there’s a lot of grammar-based sections in either test. The same for math. You may be a great math student, but being in a math class is very different from taking one of these tests because in math class you’re focused on a single area. Let’s say you’re in algebra 2 or in pre-calc, you stay focused for an entire academic year on that one subject. On the ACT or the SAT you have to be able to bounce back and forth between all types of math questions. So on the SAT you’ve got an algebra question next to a statistics question next to a geometry question next to a numbers and operations question. There’s no method or continuity as to how those questions are asked, and it takes some practice.

How many times can a student take the ACT or SAT? Many students take it three times. There’s no problem taking it three times, but you may not want to take it more than that. We found that often you may get diminishing returns after you’ve taken it three times.

But up to three times you can still get better scores?
Yes. For many students it’s an incremental process. You have to keep working it, and the more time you spend with it the better you get.

Thanks, Barbara!
You’re very welcome, Sharon.

Chyten Educational Services
New Canaan, Connecticut
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Interviews with College Admissions Counselors: University of Bridgeport

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Welcome to an Ongoing Series on College Admissions

If you’re starting the college admissions process you’ve probably discovered that it’s not always easy to find answers to your college admissions questions. That’s why I created a place where you can hear directly from college admission counselors about applying to college, interviewing for college, college application essay writing, and financial aid.

I developed these questions with help from families who’ve recently been through the college admissions process. Because each school answers the same set of questions, you can compare what they say.

I hope you find this a valuable resource for college admissions information. Who knows? You might even find yourself considering options you hadn’t thought of before.

University of Bridgeport admission information

With the introduction out of the way, let’s find out about the University of Bridgeport.

Originally founded in 1927 as a junior college, University of Bridgeport ranks as the 10th most racially diverse university in the nation. UB is located in Bridgeport, Connecticut, and is fully accredited by the New England Association of Schools and Colleges. According to the school’s website, the university offers career-oriented programs for motivated students who seek personal growth and professional success. For the fall 2010 semester, UB accepted 3300 students and 572 of those students enrolled.

Facts at a Glance:

  • 2,000+ undergraduates
  • Rolling admissions
  • Tuition: $24,300, Room and Board: $11,400 (2011)
  • Average SAT score: 1000 (Math and Verbal)
  • Average GPA: 2.8
  • 50% live on campus
  • 96% receive financial aid
  • 80% go on to get their masters
  • 98% find jobs before they graduate

ADMISSIONS QUESTIONS

Gretchen Camp, Undergraduate Admissions Counselor, answered the following questions during a recent interview:

Q. What percentage of applicants do you admit?

A: The University of Bridgeport accepts approximately 60% of our applicants.

Q: Does UB use its own application?

A: Yes, we have an application that’s specific to the University of Bridgeport. We are not members of the Common Application.

Applying

Q: Does applying early decision/action improve a student’s chances for admission?

A: UB operates on rolling admissions, which means that we accept applications all throughout the year. I wouldn’t necessarily say that a student has a greater chance of being admitted if they apply early on in their senior year, but it definitely makes that student stand out because they are demonstrating a strong interest in UB. Applying early also gives a student more time to build a relationship with their admissions counselor, which I believe is an important piece of the overall admissions experience.

Q: How important are extracurricular activities in admissions decisions?

A: A student’s involvement in extracurricular activities is very important. When reviewing an application, it is great to see that a student has been involved in extracurricular activities because it indicates that they have a grasp on time management and are willing to be a part of something greater than themselves.

Q: How important is taking advanced, accelerated, or honors courses?

A: When reviewing a high school transcript, it is encouraging to see these courses because it indicates that a student has chosen to challenge him or herself. It will not hurt a student if they have not chosen to take these classes because in many cases, a college preparatory or general level class is challenging for a student. We also recognize that some high schools do not offer as many advanced, accelerated, or honors courses as other high schools do, and so that is taken into consideration as well.

Q: Which teachers should write a recommendation?

A: If a student chooses to submit a letter (or letters) of recommendation, it is helpful to read letters from a guidance counselor and/or teacher who knows the student well and who can speak to the student’s character. A student should consider requesting a letter of recommendation from a high school instructor who teaches a subject that the student is interested in studying at UB. For example, if a student is applying for Health Sciences or Computer Engineering, a letter of recommendation from a math or science teacher would be beneficial. A student who is interested in our Music program may want to ask their music teacher or band conductor to write a letter of recommendation.

Q: Do you look for what is not said in a recommendation?

A: If a letter of recommendation seems vague or is extremely short, two thoughts generally go through my head. 1) The person writing this letter of recommendation does not know the applicant very well and/or 2) There may be something that the counselor or teacher is omitting. In a few cases, I have had additional questions and have called a counselor to collect more information about an applicant.

Q: Is the quality of an applicant’s high school taken into consideration?

A: The quality of an applicant’s high school is taken into consideration, but it is what a student does within their school environment that really counts. We understand that a student may have different opportunities at a private high school versus a technical high school, and at a public school versus a magnet school.

Q: What is the relative importance of grades versus board scores?

A:  A student’s grades and standardized test scores are weighed equally when making an admissions decision. Both are also taken into consideration when a student is being evaluated for a merit scholarship. However, I understand that not all students are strong test takers because I have never been a great test taker myself. In almost all cases though, I believe that a student’s grades are a stronger indication of the type of student that they are and of the potential that they have at the college level.

Q: There’s been controversy about using tests like the SAT and ACT in the admissions process. Where does your school stand?

A: At this point in time, UB is not test-optional. However, the idea of becoming test-optional is being considered and thoroughly researched. We do understand that a test score is not always the best indicator of the type of work that a student is capable of doing, and this is why the possibility of becoming test-optional is currently being discussed.

Q: Should a student discuss or explain a poor grade or marking period(s)? If so, when?

A: If one of my students has had a difficult time in a particular class or during a specific marking period, I encourage them to make a note of it in either their personal statement or on a separate piece of paper in their application packet. Because our admissions decision is focused heavily a students’ academic history, it is very important that a student disclose information regarding a low mark (or marks.) For example, I once noticed that a student of mine had missed quite a few days of school during a school year and had struggled in several classes. I reached out to her and discovered that she had lost a close family member that school year and therefore, her grades were affected negatively. She was ultimately accepted to the university.

Interviewing

Q: Does your school offer interviews with admissions counselors? If not, why?

A: We absolutely encourage our applicants to make an appointment with their admissions counselor – not necessarily for an interview, but to sit down and allow an admissions counselor to get to know them a bit more. It’s really great to put a name with a face! In some cases, an applicant is notified that they must schedule an interview – this generally occurs when we would like to collect more information from an applicant before making an admissions decision.

Essay Writing

Q: What qualities do you look for in a well-written essay?

A: While UB doesn’t require that a student submit an essay, we strongly recommend that a student consider doing so. It is the perfect opportunity for a student to display his or herself in the best light possible and to highlight strengths and justify weaknesses (if necessary). It also gives a student the chance to tell us a story, or to describe why they feel that they are a great fit for UB. Ultimately, an essay must be well-written and well-structured. First impressions are everything and I can’t stress enough how important it is to proof-read an essay before submitting it.

Q: Is there a type of essay you would recommend against?

A: I think that it is really important that a student understands who their audience is. I give students a lot of credit for putting themselves out there and for sharing details of their lives that they may not have shared with anyone prior to writing their essay. However, there is a fine line between sharing just the right amount of information and sharing too much information. What a student talks about casually with friends is not always appropriate to share with an admissions counselor. It is important to find a balance.

Q: Can an essay make or break an admission? Please give an example.

A: In some cases, an essay can most certainly make or break an admissions decision. In a specific case, an applicant had a solid GPA and SAT scores, but her qualifications were a bit below what we were looking for in regards to Biology. She wrote a terrific essay about her childhood in Africa, her difficult transition to the United States, and how her experiences in Africa had led her to choose Biology (Pre-Med) as a major. Her essay was very well-written, it told a great story, and there was not a single grammatical error. I recommended her for admission (in part due to her essay) and she was admitted because she not only had acceptable academic qualifications, but she had also demonstrated incredible writing skills. I believe that she would have been referred to a different program had she not submitted that engaging essay.

Financial Aid

Q: How has the recession affected the admissions process and the availability of financial aid?

A: At this point in time, the recession has not affected the admissions process or availability of financial aid. UB had a very successful 2010 enrollment year and we enrolled one of the largest classes in recent history! UB was not only able to increase our merit scholarships, but our average financial aid package has also increased from $22,000/year to $25,000 per year. Roughly 96% of our students receive some type of financial aid. Currently, we are waiting on the Federal Government to make some important decisions that may or may not affect financial aid availability to students nationwide.

Q: What part of the admissions process is most misunderstood?

A: I think that the financial aid aspect of the admissions process is misunderstood often. That is why is so important for students and parents to educate themselves about Financial Aid and the options available to them. Many students and parents are confused about the EFC (Expected Family Contribution) – this is calculated after a student submits their FAFSA (www.fafsa.ed.gov) and many times a student’s EFC is 0. When an EFC is 0, many people assume that there will be no out-of-pocket expenses, but this is not the case. Oftentimes, a student (or parent) may need to take out federal or private loans to help cover the total cost of attendance. Again, I cannot stress enough how important it is to do your homework when it comes to Financial Aid.

Finally…

Q: How can people connect with your school and your students?

A: There are several ways that interested students can connect with UB and its students. Last year, we updated our website, www.bridgeport.edu and it is full of detailed information pertaining to UB. We are on Facebook at http://www.facebook.com/UBridgeportAdmissions and on Zinch at http://www.zinch.com/college/bridgeport. Our Twitter page is located at http://twitter.com/UB_Admissions and we have some great videos on YouTube at http://www.youtube.com/uofbridgeport.

Q: Please add a question (or two) specific to your school.
Question: Is your campus safe?

A: UB is located in Connecticut’s largest city, so maintaining a safe environment for students, faculty, and staff is UB’s top priority. There are security officers available to our students, faculty, and staff 24/7. Our campus is very safe and UB has won awards (i.e. the prestigious Jeanne Clery Campus Safety Award) for having outstanding and innovative security measures in place.

Question: What do I do if I am not sure what to major in?
A: UB has over 50 majors that students are able to choose from. If a high school senior is still not sure what they would like to major in, they have the option to indicate on their application that they are still deciding. Many of our undecided students choose a major within their first year of study at UB.

To Contact Bridgeport University:

126 Park Avenue
Bridgeport, CT 06604
1-800-EXCEL-UB (392-3582)
www.bridgeport.edu

other posts in this series:
Housatonic Community College
Ithaca College
Quinnipiac University
Sacred Heart University
University of Connecticut

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College Essay Writing: Make it Easy! Keep a Journal

Have you thought about writing your college essay yet? Is that the sound of laughter I hear?

I know, it’s April. It’s way too early to think about writing a college application essay. There’s school and classes and tests — enough stress in your life. But here’s something you can do to have less stress later:

Keep a journal.

  • It’s quick
  • It’s easy
  • You can use it to get to know yourself
  • Later it can help you come up with ideas for your college application essay

Why?

Colleges want to know who they’re accepting — not just from grades and test scores — but what kind of people they’re choosing. That’s what your essay will show — what makes you unique, why you’re interesting, what you can offer your school and community. Why they should choose you.

It’s a tall order. Most students have never written this kind of essay. That’s why a journal can help. It’s just like a diary if you’ve kept one. You can put anything in it. It doesn’t matter what. Even what you ate for dinner.

Make it fun. No stress. Just open a page or flip open your computer and away you go.

Put in your journal:

  • Ideas
  • Observations
  • Plans you’d like to make
  • Descriptions of people, places, activities
  • Questions
  • Funny things
  • Small things
  • Big things
  • Surprising things
  • Things that make you proud, sad, cautious, laugh…
  • Anything

Write on a notepad, on your computer, whatever’s easiest. Get to know yourself. Then, when you’re finally ready to begin, you won’t have to stare at a blank page wondering where to start. You’ll have a notebook full of inspiration.


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Real Life Story: College Essay Rejection

This is the story of a young man who made a mistake in one sentence of his college application essay and it cost him admittance to Amherst.

Here’s how it goes:

Recently an NPR reporter went behind the scenes at Amherst College in Massachusetts to see how college admissions decisions are made. The admissions committee was having one of their final meetings; they’d narrowed it down to the top 15 percent of applicants and now, one by one, they were presenting each student’s grades, test scores, extracurriculars, and essays.

The Essay is Discussed

The committee turned to the application of the young man in question. His college application essay caught the attention of a dean, and not in a good way. She was troubled by a sentence that read ”I rarely get truly fascinated by a subject.” The student went on to say that music was his exception. No one was pleased.

“That was flabbergasting,” commented one of the admissions readers.

“Intellectual passion is a must,” said the Dean of Admissions. Everyone agreed. The student was not admitted.

What Went Wrong?

The student clearly intended to write about his passion for music. So why did the college admissions committee care more about what he said first: “I rarely get truly fascinated by a subject”?

The Student Violated 2 Major Rules:

1. Know Your Reader

Amherst is a small, prestigious liberal arts college. If you go to their website and read the school’s philosophy it’s all about intellectual curiosity. Did this student visit Amherst’s website? I don’t know. But when he said he wasn’t fascinated by anything other than music he certainly seemed not to understand.

Remember you’re not writing your college application essay for you — you’re writing it for college admissions readers to read and like. You want them to finish your essay and want you to go to their school. You have to figure out what makes you a good fit and how you’re going to convey that.

One way to begin is to visit the school’s website. You can get a lot of information from a website. What’s their educational philosophy? What kind of students do they want to attract? Then you can begin to decide how to show them you’re that kind of person.

2. Don’t Cast Yourself in a Negative Light

I’m sure this student had no idea he was saying anything negative about himself. After all, he was writing about his love of music. But by saying “I rarely get truly fascinated by a subject” he casts himself in a negative light. He’s telling the college admissions reader “I really don’t care much about stuff, except I like music.”

One other thing I want to point out is his use of the present tense: “I rarely get truly fascinated by a subject” By writing in the present tense he’s talking about now. It’s not something that used to be — he’s not interested now.

What if the sentence were changed slightly? What if this college application essay began, “I started getting fascinated by new ideas when I fell in love with music”? Doesn’t that sound more positive? Instead of the word “rarely” I used the word “started” — something has begun. A transformation. A journey. That might get the attention of the Amherst admissions committee. I’m not saying it would have been right for this student, but you can see the difference it makes. This sentence is now about someone who loves the idea of learning, and is completely positive.

You always want to showcase yourself in a positive light. That’s not to say you shouldn’t write about a personal journey or a learning experience; we all make mistakes or come to important realizations in our lives — that can make a powerful essay. But you don’t want to give a negative impression. Not a smart way to portray yourself.

Remember:

  • Know your reader
  • Don’t cast yourself in a negative light

If you’re not sure,  have someone read your essays. Find someone who understands what colleges are looking for, and where the pitfalls lie, and ask them for constructive criticism. Make sure to give yourself time to make adjustments.

Ultimately, the admissions process is not an exact science. But college admissions committees don’t take the process lightly; they struggle with knowing they hold each student’s future in their hands.

Make sure you hold as much of your future in your own hands as you can. Write a great essay.


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Attaching Resumes or Activity Sheets to an Application – The Right Way

In my last post I talked about an interesting LinkedIn discussion among college professionals as to whether or not students should have a resume or activity sheet. Now I want to tackle another question:

Should students attach a resume or activity sheet to their college application?

For that answer I turned to friend and colleague Betsy Bell, a college consultant whose company is Acorn Educational Consulting in Wilton, Connecticut. Here’s what Betsy says:

“I have my students create a resume so I can see what their activities are and their level of commitment in each activity. If their activities are easily covered on the application with all the necessary descriptions included, their resumes are not included in the application.

If there is not enough space on the application for good descriptions, and their resume has more in-depth descriptions of their leadership roles, then we will upload their resume.

If the student is applying to the very top schools they might be asked to restrict their resume to one page, or not include one at all. I read the fine print just to make sure we are following the rules.

On the common application there are 12 spaces for activities. Usually that is plenty for most students, but there is limited space for descriptions, and in these cases I would have the resume uploaded in the “additional information” space which is after the essay on the common application. Each school might have very specific requirements and I read them very carefully as we do not want to irritate the admissions people.”

To summarize:

DO include a resume/activity sheet:

  • If there is not enough space on the application and the resume has more in-depth descriptions of a student’s leadership roles
  • Upload to the “additional information” space on the common application

DON’T include a resume/activity sheet:

  • If activities are easily covered on the application with all the necessary descriptions included
  • In other words: Don’t Duplicate Information

READ the fine print and  follow the rules

  • You don’t want to annoy the college admissions people

Thanks, Betsy!

Read  Resumes and Activity Sheets: Good Idea When Applying to College?


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Resumes and Activity Sheets: Good Idea When Applying to College?

Are resumes or activity sheets a good idea to use when applying to college?

This question recently sparked a lively debate among admissions professionals on LinkedIn.  Interestingly, the answers were split.  Here’s a representative sampling:

Admission CounselorsAdvice:

Joanne Robertson, Assistant Director, Transfer Admissions at Quinnipiac University, says yes to activity sheets but no to resumes: “Although it is a great icebreaker for the student to provide us with an activity sheet, unless they are applying for one of our majors that need documented hours for the admission requirement, a resume is definitely overkill. I have had the unfortunate experience of talking to parents who overwhelm us with details on “internships” etc. Seriously, then why is your child applying to college? Sounds like they are already set.”

Warren Harman, Admission Professional at Clarkson University, says yes to resumes and activity sheets:  “Every time I open an application I ask “Who are you?” Hopefully, the student’s application will answer that question. The resume gives our team a better idea of what the student is most passionate about. Call it what you will, a resume or activities sheet gives us a better feel for how happy the student would be to attend our school.”

Ken Higgins, Assistant Dean of Undergraduate Admissions at Sacred Heart University, also says yes to resumes and activities sheets: “Oftentimes I’ll ask a student if they have any sort of resume or an activities sheet so we can go over that and discuss each bullet or topic. That gives me a sense of their extracurricular activities as well.”

Opinions differ, so what should you do?

  • When admissions professionals didn’t like resumes it was usually because of their unnecessary detail and length (some they saw were six pages long). If your resume is more than a couple of pages, try putting together an activities list that doesn’t include the typical resume stuff like where you go to school, GPA, scores, etc.
  • Don’t include huge explanations and don’t include every single thing you did in the past four years.
  • Don’t be fooled into thinking you definitely need a resume/activity sheet. If everything you want to say is easily conveyed through what they ask on the application, then don’t include anything extra.
  • Don’t duplicate information already provided in the application.

Look for part two: “Attaching Resumes or Activity Sheets to an Application – The Right Way”